correct some mistakes from research paper (4 pages), English homework help

This is the topic:  Do children learn better in boys-only and girls-only schools?

You will be able to see the mistakes on the file and the notes are written by red color. There is good example of how to start with a quote.

when you are adding any source:

at least 7 cited sources from at least 3 different media. At least2 f those should books. Acceptable sources form the internet would be .net, .org, .gov, .edu. You may use newspapers and videos. 

Do not use .com of Wickepedia.

follow MLA format.

Thank you,